you need some consistency
Graphics were good in some places, horrible in others. Animation was ok in some places (albeit obviously rotoscoped) and horrible in others. Sound was average, voice acting could use some work and the overall soundtrack needs level tweeking (you should be able to clearly hear voices over backing music).
Story is....well its to be continued so i donno... it looks to be in a similar vein if not a straight ripoff of .hack though.
Almost average.....progress to you, mate.